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上片神伤,下片释然,过度自然,所以整首词读来思路流畅,感情真挚而富于变化,不错。赞一个!
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整体思路清晰,语言流畅,写出了季节更替时人内心的幽微的情绪。很不错。学习了。但是“添酒推杯换盏”一句略显重复,谨供参考!
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