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古典诗十四期五律第二十一讲冬组作业贴 |
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问好同学,整首诗脉络分明,语言流畅,情感真挚,结句有味,小瑕疵,颔联上分句三仄尾在五律中虽然不是大问题,但也应该注意避免,颈联的“思”这里做名词应该是“仄”声,其他都不错
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