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没有辞藻堆砌,浅而易懂,贴近生活。写得不错。👍
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谎言老师点评:起后面重复,颈联对仗差点,结意不高,符合起承转合
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谎言老师点评:对高考学子殷切希望,意不错,整诗,诗家语不足,谴词有点不到位,词汇积累不足
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谎言老师点评:立意清晰,中间二联,对仗差点,有凑韵感觉,诗家语差点
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