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古典诗十九中级班第十六讲颜如组作业帖 |
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格律自检,例举一、二件事例,小中见大,更有说服力,中二联对仗上,后三字偏宽。继续努力,期待佳作。
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格律自检,作业完成不错,对仗工整,中二联节奏有变化,有点小问题,结句有虚浮。
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