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问好同学,题目与内容契合度欠佳:诗题是《乡村暮色》,但诗文开篇“冬来塞外冷荒丘”,描绘重点偏向塞外冬日的荒寒,对乡村暮色的刻画缺乏针对性。颔联 “几处寒鸦栖远树,满河碎玉卧孤舟”,更多呈现冬日景象,...
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问好同学,整首诗意平淡,对仗不严谨,逻辑连贯性欠佳,继续进步。
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