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词十五初级班第六讲子瞻组作业贴,评阅老师:佬诡梓8-22,水如月剩余楼层 |
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问好同学,醒醒吧,好像你在做梦啊,遣词要斟酌,叙事要有层次感,上阙后半阙,和下阙的上半阙重了啊,个见
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问好同学,上下阙链接的较好,但是择字遣词上要斟酌
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问好同学,较好,如果上景下情就更好了,但是下阙描叙的景较多了,再接再厉吧,个见
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