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古典诗十七.五律第2讲秋组作业帖 |
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问候雨后彩虹同学,这首五律总体不错,但我个人认为这首五律除了第四句其他句跟标题不符。
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问候青松同学,这首五律写的很完美,我也是在鸡蛋里挑骨头,我个人认为漂水,绕湖有些合掌。
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