2031| 43
|
古典诗十八期绕梁组第三讲作业帖: |
| ||
| ||
| ||
| ||
| ||
| ||
| ||
| ||
| ||
点评
小诗起承两句没有紧扣主题,似乎走远了些,转句看到了秋,最终还是没“收”。另外,有些字词也稍有不当,比如“拍柳”,形容稻田一望无垠用“”数万行”。以上只是个见,继续加油!
| ||
|Archiver|手机版|小黑屋|古典听风书院
( 蜀ICP备15023305号-1 )
GMT+8, 2025-7-18 08:22 , Processed in 0.124841 second(s), 23 queries .
Powered by Discuz! X3.2 Licensed
© 2001-2013 Comsenz Inc.