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古典词二十六期初级班灵泽组第十三讲作业帖 |
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试评:这阕词基本上把初级班结业的感想写出来了,当然在遣词造句上还有待提高。上阕的结句“此期相离别、牵念在途中”和下阕的结句“今朝常记取。应是墨香浓”,调换一下,则更合理。
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