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问好学友!词格无误。作品首拍切题,上片首拍二分句“乐穷郎”组合偏硬,五言分句句读不够丝滑,二拍对偶尚可,歇拍入题,下片前两拍意脉流畅,转折力度欠佳,四拍前两拍组合带裂痕,尾拍合之乏力!词作符合题目要求
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