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古典词十三基础班第九讲袷衣组作业贴评阅;猪猪2-12,佬诡梓13后 |
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问好春光同学!格律请自检。小词整体不错,很流畅,只是你的题目是冬夜,但你选取的意象比如:梧叶、西风落花等本人觉得不合节令。箫音不如箫声更顺口,尾句九言句可再酌。不当处望见谅
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