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问好茹风,总的来看,你这首写的挺好,但是有几处再斟酌一下!尾联表达清明思乡,但是前边缺少铺垫,首联的“闲”字,有悠闲的意思,和主题不和谐,再斟酌一下首联,最好能写出自己是客居在外!哪人知,感觉不如....
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