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古典诗十一期七律第十一讲秋组作业贴 |
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问好心语,首联总起可以,但是超群清嘉说的太早了,露了,并且上分句三仄尾了,颔联实写不错,颈联再想想,尤其下分句,对尾联的禅心质洁支撑不够,没做足铺垫,显得尾联孤单了!
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