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词十五初级班第十五讲白石组作业贴,评阅老师:寒月5-18、玫瑰19-32、清幽剩余楼层 |
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问好长空。忽报鱼传素,却,须斟酌。词味浓,同窗情重。
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寒月老师评:问好淡淡菊花香。后面有三更雨无月,没用再酌下。摇摇口语化了,频摇。还?其他还好。
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