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古典诗十四期基础第十三讲秋组作业贴: | 
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问好学友。第一题不说了;第二题对句1隔景,对句2还不错;第三题小绝格律无误,前三句赞美老师含辛茹苦,淡看名利,无私奉献的高尚品质,合句感叹老师的似海恩情,显得有点突兀,转合之间形成断裂。 
 
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诗意不错,赞。教鞭如何沉呢,三四句主语是不是暗换了?其他好 
 
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