楼主: 碧荷听雨
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词十七初级班第九讲听雪组作业贴 |
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浅评:委婉,细腻,一波三折。进进退退之间,流转着浓浓情意。尤喜“拣些思绪入诗行”,虚写一句。“拣些”看似轻描淡写,却偏偏用心良苦:“嘱咐云中青鸟递身旁”。赏学了!
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