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古典诗十四期五律第六讲秋组作业贴: | 
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问好同学.简评:这首诗写的是蝉的习性蜕变,围绕一个中心立意点写的,只是措辞欠佳,有待提高,脉络还算清晰,只是用词不当,苦罪、聒噪吐深情,这些词都有待提高锤炼!个见!说错的不要见怪! 
 
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