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古典诗十四期五律第十五讲春组作业贴: |
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虽说咏济水,但主题游离。除一句和三句,有济水影子,其他全有凑之嫌。第七句有点太白,诗味大减。以后写作时下功夫去查资料,加油!!
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问好诗友,小诗起结都挺好,尤喜起句很漂亮。中二联稍欠些。承句意相近,无拓展且不是对仗句。转句上联犹能望用词不够准确,下联韵字建议换下。整体不错加油!
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