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古典词十九初级班折桂组第九讲作业 |
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风,采用概括的手法白描,私下以为七字句中景字当酌,应换作一个动词,否则此句语意与风无关。云,运用特写镜头,突出云的飘零无依,但后两句犯了重比,至使本体不清了。
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东风后半阙写的突兀。。整体写的好看,赞
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