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古典词二十初级班凌霜组第十四讲作业贴 |
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点评
点评:此词立意布局很好的,字句流畅,脉胳清晰。情感自然到位。只是有几个地方可以修改凝炼。如第四句的尾二“破防”,第五句的“雪染霜”,本来是雪上加霜意思,对吧,你这样用就会产生不必要的误会,这样是说...
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