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古典诗期第十七基础第17讲秋组作业帖 |
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问候同学,这首诗的格律和韵都正确,但我个人认为首句的风正飘舟和承句的横篙愿荡取一即可。
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问好冬尽同学,全诗格律正确,诗意挺好。唯转句绿荫遮满地用词不准,个见
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问好樱花同学,全诗格律正确,意思挺好,唯在敲词造句上还可再斟酌
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问好淡淡的笑同学,全诗格律正确,写出了心里话,为你点赞。唯遣词造句还可再斟酌
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