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古典诗十八期绿绮组第九讲作业帖 |
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狼师吉祥!小绝诗意可见,只是尚未成形。韵字非同一韵部。抛开韵部,三个韵字,卿、中皆不稳。拉四君子作衬的手法,非常值得肯定。选用同一韵部韵脚后,再重新组织句子哈。加油干吧!
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