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古典诗十八期绕梁组第十六讲作业帖 |
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问好梦云:《冬至》是二十四节气之一,这天是冬天最寒冷的天气。此日过后阳气逐渐上升。因此你的起句欠斟酌。承句可以的,写出了冬至的习俗。转句与结句离题,与冬至节日无关。素材选用不当。见意修改一下。
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