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古典词二十二期初级班第十五讲舒荷组作业贴 |
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问好词友!此词选用的是贺铸体,格律用韵无误,立意明确,语意顺达,情感真挚,上下片的后二句最好选用对仗比较好。
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问好学友,你这临江仙上阕最后两句多字了。望自行修改
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