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古典元曲一期小桥组第九讲作业贴 |
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1,已经明确季节了,(叶无霜)没必要交代,(微风无助)意思有点模糊。2,从煞尾来看,立意不是很清,视做纯景,还算说的过去吧。3,还是不错的,尤其是尾
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点评
鸿鹄豪情老师点评:简评:烟树一段见凑,惜春一段可在斟酌。情子任,一处可商榷。回想一句可在斟酌。收笔尚可。
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