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古典诗二十期基础班第十五讲晴组作业帖: |
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问好云儿同学,第一题正确的,小诗格律正确的,不错。第一句说粉妆又是淡抺,矛盾了,用清妆好点。二句改成恰似仙姑立玉台,三句没问题,四句改成一片冰心共云裁,君太宽泛了。加油
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第一题正确,第二题,脉络清析,立意不高,很平淡。说错勿怪哈
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