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古典词研四期风荷组第三讲作业帖 |
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问好学友,己经词研了格律自检,简单说几句,上片由景转情时衔接有脱的感觉,衔接不自然,眉已蹙已含愁,下句就显重复,全词由景转相思,词意基本还顺,有始有终,唯一不足就句子意思仍须凝练,,
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