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古典诗二十期七律第二讲晴组作业帖 |
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简评:此律不错,起承转合完美,尾联也得到了升华!美中不足,首联下分句貌似病句,韵字求有些牵强,还有点小问题就是律中首字平仄失衡,尾联须知出律了,以后稍注意下就行!欣赏了!
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