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词十五初级班第六讲易安组作业贴,评阅老师:紫玉清涵 8-20,金秋21-33,清茶剩余楼层 |
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脉络清晰层次分明,总体不错,有些字可炼,不能太‘’平白‘’煞尾收束全篇,但如果有留白,就能给读者想象的空间,显得有‘’余味‘’。
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