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古典诗十四期基础第十五讲冬组作业贴: | 
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雨后柳问好平凡老师。一首很上口的小绝,只是在字的运用上缺少诗家之味,比如说:牵儿女只,虽意思能明白,但用法可商榷。另,在转结上略显直白。加油。 
 
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雨后柳问好一粒沙儿老师。格律用韵都没问题,从意脉来看也没断裂,赞一个。但诗,特别是绝句,字少意深 ,要避免写成顺口溜。加油。 
 
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