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古典词十八期紫竹组第二讲作业贴 |
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问好心雨诗友,起承转合非常完美!对仗工整,看得出有功底!点赞!
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问好醉里挑灯看剑诗友,此词看上去有点乱,冒似跑偏啦,跟题目不符啊!继续努力!加油!
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问好麦子诗友,此词行文流畅结句感觉弱了,可以换个更好的,把立意再提高一点,另外,诗词是用文字来表达心情的,换平仄比韵律更恰当一些,个见哈!一起学习!
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问好菁菁诗友,用词典雅,行文流畅自然,颇有李白那种潇洒!为你点赞!
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