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词填的很有朦胧美,尤其下阕的声起三重叠用的很美妙,层层递进,最后一句娘唤声,有从梦中惊醒般的意识流手法,坏就坏在这个有字,忽有娘呼我,难道娘是忽然才有的吗?改为忽听多好,总体还是不错,填词有一定功底!
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