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古典诗十四期七律第十四讲秋组作业贴: |
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问好学友!格律有误!请自行检验!造景入情都不尽人意!对仗不工,且凑字!应加强练习!
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问好学友!格律有误!请自行检验!起承转合尚可!对仗欠工整!用词不精,太过口语化,诗味不浓!应加强练习!
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