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古典词十九初级班采莲组第七讲作业 |
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上阙朗朗上口,下阙最后一句突兀
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问好学友,词路清晰,睹物思人之作,赞一个
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问好学友,此词上片通景重复描写,下片衔接 的也有些突兀,努力吧
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问好学友,上片结句应再考虑下,极目欠妥,下片胜日一词,也应考虑下
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