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古典词二十二期初级班第三讲舒荷组作业贴: |
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点评,脉脉清晰,立意明确。舟暖可琢,总体尚好。
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点评:立意明确。正字再琢,知了,知了,这里和上下句连接不紧密。
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脉脉清晰,立意明确。伫,步矛盾了,总体尚可。
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