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古典词二十二期初级班第十讲清曲组作业贴 |
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本词写了两次寻梅所见景色,文笔清秀,文脉清晰,表达流畅。两次寻梅所见景色不同,心情亦不同,上下两片用对比写法,使这阕词充满情趣,加油!
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本词写分别后的思念,用倒叙手法,文脉清晰,文笔清透,写出因思念而黯自神伤。煞尾句写的好:于今梦里亦难逢,枕湿清痕,何日重温”,表达温婉!个别词句要炼字炼意!加油!
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