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古典词23初级班第八讲绕梁组作业处 |
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整体来看,语言凝练有意蕴,不当之处情景交融应是比较含蓄的表达情感吧,思路清不妥,天雨你想表达的是他美丽缥缈,还是滋润万物的无私与点染都不切合。前六句主语是人,后两句主语变修辞了,望斟酌。
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