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古典词二十四期初级班第十讲香雪组作业贴 |
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词友好。本词用字精当,能够感受到作者的惬意和感触,但应注意景色描写的配合,望斟酌修改。
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词友好。词作构思奇特,景情交融,点赞。下阙尘字重复,红尘可否改为人间?供参考
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