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古典词二十八期创作班长风组第十三讲作业帖 |
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格律正确,反复读了几遍,也没看懂作者是在表达什么。整首词景、事、情跳转突兀,时空割裂,意象堆砌无串联,行文脉络、叙事逻辑、场景衔接出了问题,所以观感零散、诗意拧巴。
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