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古典词二十二期初级班第五讲清曲组作业贴 |
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月月师友好,这首送友写得还是不错的里边有情,那种愁和难舍可见一般。只是“恼恨,满腹”二句用词随意,太过口语化。个人觉得平时多写多读还是有必要的,就这样期待你的蜕变
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