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~~木犹:首联这‘’笑‘’字未免搞笑,这与后分句分明两种气氛的说。
‘’间或‘’一词明显随手。
岂有以‘’飞灰‘’告慰祖先的?
家国情怀,只禁火怕是不够,文明长传,未免又太过了,落处在那? 
 
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~~木犹:老大,限韵的说,这先韵什么情况?重写重写。 
 
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