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古典诗十四期五律第二十三讲晴组作业贴: | 
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心心评:师友好,以环境起势只是下分句太笼统了偏向于口语。功高句和何处寻在布局上铺垫不足,前者少依据后者少深意,总结下师友用心不够不符水准,期待下次精彩。 
 
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心心点评:师友好,点题无误,承接平实。小瑕疵化句有痕啊,期待下次精彩。 
 
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