楼主: 口心雨
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古典诗十四期五律第十二讲晴组作业贴: |
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山野绕青台与雪无关;何必对纵横不够工整;中二联前两字同构,尽量避免;其他尚好
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吹玉蕊,琼屑舞,飘银絮雷同;纯骨衬似不通;其他尚好
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好诗!中二两尤好!
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