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古典联十一清新组第二十讲作业贴(评阅老师—英子) |
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问好清风秋月,对句一,漂亮,对句二好看,学习了
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问好沉默,对句一可以,对句二再炼,后三节奏不对
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问好如烟,对句一后三再炼,对句二可以
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问好谷韵,对句一好看,对句二可以
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