| 
 
 2780| 35
 
 | 
古典诗十八初级班第二十五讲绕梁组作业贴 | 
  | ||
  | ||
  | ||
  | ||
  | ||
  | ||
 点评
浅评:还是较不错的一绝,只是合句的照字欠妥,应再酌 
 
 | ||
 点评
浅评:起句意平,语白,承句与起有重字,春日放鸢是多么快乐美好一事,纸鸢收敛春光之美好?比喻应再酌 
 
 | ||
|Archiver|手机版|小黑屋|古典听风书院
( 蜀ICP备15023305号-1 )
GMT+8, 2025-11-4 20:50 , Processed in 0.375976 second(s), 21 queries .
Powered by Discuz! X3.2 Licensed
© 2001-2013 Comsenz Inc.