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中级班溪山组第七讲作业帖 | 
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合律。为了押韵和格律。强行造句。词不达意,不知所云。 
 
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描写到位,行文流畅。让人有身临其境的感觉。脚下白云低,活灵活现。唯黄鹤句,不明所以。因为离得近的通常会比较大。所以这种不是很出名的景点,最好在正文之前有个小序交代一下。 
 
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