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问好诗友!此律应该是咏物诗,咏物诗讲究不即不离,不沾不脱,物我相融,有所寄托。而此诗前二联与后二联意脉断开,不相表里,牵强搪塞。遣词造句尚欠生动精准,且诗中“开屏”“花丛”失对失沾,已然出律,实不应该
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